Blog #5 Questions About Our Writing... (RESPONSE)

1. The aspect that has been most successful to me was finding my place in the continuum of icons and adding big ideas into the writing. This is because I already have a passionate opinion that I can convey to readers through this project.
2. All of the writing tips have been helpful (except for the 5th one, 'watch those adverbs', because I write in a certain way that doesn't contain as many repetitive adverbs). Of all of them, the ones most important of all are the 'make meaning early' and the 'concerts, not pancakes' rules. These two rules help establish a good, strong point in my paper.
3. The most challenging aspect of the Artist Statement is the unknown. What point should I get across? Should I use a different Intro? Would this writing convey my point to the ready? All these questions and more are daunting when I begin writing and editing my Artist Statement...
4. The writing tip that is the most difficult for me was the loop, because with the bigger picture in mind I had to change the wording in the Intro and Outro so that it made more sense to the reader.
5. Here is a segment that I am working on in my Artist Statement:

You have just been admitted to the hospital, sick with a massive fever and pain all over; you are infected with the Ebola Virus. The survival rate of Ebola is very slim; with a 90% mortality rate almost all of the patients perish by massive hemoraging (a very painful internal bleeding out of every orifice of your body). How would a student such as myself learn about this terrifying virus? I learned about the lethality of viruses by reading “The Hot Zone”, by Richard Preston. When I read the book, it gave me an intense chill, especially when one of the chapters entailed a group of Center for Disease Control (CDC) agents and their work to prevent an airborne Ebola virus from spreading into the general public. One of my thoughts after finishing the book was, “What would the world be like if we didn’t have people who risked their lives and rose above the occasion for the better good?” I talked with my father about the book and how crazy viruses are. Since he is an anesthesiologist, he had learned about some deadly diseases in his line of work.

-What do you think would be a good intro strategy for this paragraph if you yourself were writing about viruses? (it is my Intro)

-Based on you judgement, are there any problems that I have missed? Could these problems be fixed by the writing tips?

-What are the emotions and thoughts that hit you when you read this first paragraph?

(TAP signing out...)

(Due Tuesday, 9/14/10, 11:59:59PM)